Blackmist
03-24-2010, 12:48 PM
I once wrote a story about Keira and her friends being trapped on an island. I didn't like how it turned out so I wrote an alternate take on it. It was significantly better. This is that story. It references the first tale briefly but I think you will catch on. All you need to know is explained in the beginning.
”Keira Succumbs Episode 2”
Keira’s friends were trapped on an island with her. They had been hypnotized and would not be set free unless Keira hypnotized herself and gave herself up forever. In an alternate universe in this same situation Keira would be overcome by her silent surroundings and loneliness. The spell the island put upon her would drive her to comply by hypnotizing herself into submission.
In this version of the tale Keira is strong and continues to seek out her captor. Her friends for the first few days stayed silent unmoving slaves in the hidden room. The same outfit left out for her remained untouched. Unknown to Keira, her captor was patient and had a backup plan. He waited for the right moment. Keira up to now had shown strong resistance to the outfit, however after searching thoroughly the entire island twice unsuccessfully, she believed she needed a new plan as well. Now she couldn’t deny she had the tiniest desire to wear the outfit, not to obey, but it just looked comfortable. Her main reason for putting it on that day though was to see if it drew the man out of hiding. Once on she went and made herself up. Her reasoning for this was to look the part; her subconscious reason was to prepare for him. The spell on the outfit had secretly started. Keira didn’t notice her slightly robotic movements to the full length mirror.
“Keira, you look stunning today!” Keira said to herself. “Yes, today is the day you shall succumb…overcome!” She slapped herself out of it.
“You are Keira! You are stronger than that. You got to keep a firm grip on yourself!”
She was now aware there was spell on her from the clothes. She must hurry, but she was confident she could resist it. Michael waiting for this moment sprung his trap. As Keira left her room she saw her friends out in the house. At first she thought her plan had worked.
“He thinks I gave in to the spell. They are free!” Keira said with excitement.
Her friends started toward her as Keira told them that it was alright; that she had not been taken. They looked up and Keira saw the pink clouds in their eyes.
“No! What’s wrong with you?” Keira asked in desperation.
The women lifted up their arms and each was holding a pendant and begun swinging them.
“Hypnotize Keira!” The women chanted. Keira saw what was happening and began backing away.
“No! I am your friend! I am trying to free you!” Keira pleaded with them.
“Hypnotize her! Hypnotize her!” The women continued chanting on emotionlessly. They were not slowed in their march toward her. Keira turned and ran down to the end of the hall. They would catch up to her, Keira realized she was trapped. She still felt strong in control of her mind but she wasn’t taking any chances and needed as much time as she could get to try and grab a hold of herself. Keira found herself backed into a corner in the master bedroom. Keira looked where they would appear any second and prepared herself for the mental showdown. This was it. The women came around the corner.
“Come with us Keira. Be like us.” They chanted.
“No.” Keira said strongly.
“You don’t know how good it feels. You must trust us.”
“You don’t know what you are saying! Let me talk to your master and I can free you!”
“Yes we will take you to him…” They said together. Keira smiled. At last she could finish this.
“…as his new slave!” The women finished. They pulled out the amulets and begun swinging them again.
“NO!” Keira screamed and tried to run but she could not move. The spell was working. The women closed in around her. Keira noticed that all the amulets were in perfect unison. This man must have some dark magic power. She realized she was fighting a losing battle, one she couldn’t win. Her eyes were locked onto the amulets. Keira fell to her knees in desperation as her friends closed in.
“Join us Keira!” The unison voices rang in her ears and all she could see were glowing green spirals. Keira's face was frozen in an expression of amazement as she let the spell invade her conciousness. She was being overcome.
“No… I must fight it...” Keira whispered.
"Join us..." They all chanted again. This time Keira chimed in as well.
"Join..." A pink mist grew in her eyes. A smile started to come across her.
"Obey" they called. Keira nodded still tranfixed and mouth agape. Her arms began to rise. Keira couldn't help it- she was being taken! “O... Ob... Obey...NO!” Keira pushed past her friends and stumbled to her feet. Keira was so strong that she still wouldn’t fall yet. Keira looked up and saw the pink mist in her eyes in the mirror.
“No! I can’t be hypnotized!” Keira was right; she had not succumbed yet to the spell. Keira turned around to the group and yelled at them.
“I WON’T BE HYPNOTIZED!” There Keira was wrong; she was strong but it was only a matter of time before even she could no longer resist the spell growing on her mind. It was putting her consciousness to sleep and it would feel really good. Keira ran out of the room. She ran down the hall towards the stairs. She had to get far away; the spell was starting to feel good. The women followed, undeterred in their mission to make their last friend one of them. They saw Keira fall again to her knees in the hallway. Keira got up again stumbled a few feet and then fall back on her knees. It felt so good. She turned around and saw her oncoming attackers.
“You think you can get me?” Keira asked in a desperate tone as she crawled backwards. “You can’t get my mind, I have too good a grasp on it” She said all this with false confidence. Her eyes were glowing with the pink mist. She had no idea how close she was to falling under the spell.
Keira’s ploy to distract her assailants while she crawled backwards into the bathroom had worked. Keira closed the door with her last burst of energy. She was exhausted. She looked at the lock but had not the energy to reach up and use it. Keira decided to brace the door with her leg. She rested against the wall and closed her eyes; she told herself she just needed a second to catch her breath. Her head drooped almost immediately. This was a mistake, her mind would be vulnerable and she would be completely entranced in seconds. Keira bolted awake- she was breathing heavily and looked quite alarmed. Her eyes were completely full of the radiantly glowing pink mist.
“Must! Stay! Awake!” she told herself. She had come back from the brink of submission. She quickly braced the door with her foot. She stayed this way for quite a while and the most amazing thing happened. The pink mist began to recede. This had never happened before. Keira was the strongest woman, putting up the greatest fight against hypnotism. Could she overcome the spell? Having felt the pressure lighten Keira, though tired, got up to check herself and see her progress. There was only a small wisp of the pink left. She was so preoccupied she didn’t hear the robotic voices of the other slaves outside.
“We must hypnotize her.”
“Wait. The master has a plan. She will succumb. Nobody can resist the master’s call to obey for long.”
“I am strong. I have resisted the spell.” Keira smiled to herself. She was about to remove the slave outfit when her premature victory call was proven wrong. Keira saw the last wisp that was hovering in her eyes move. She looked closer to examine this when she saw what was happening. The mist formed a spiral in her eyes and began moving in a circle.
“Oh no, what does this mean?” She couldn’t look away.
“Uhhh! Uhhhh! No not again!” Keira tried as hard as she could to move her head away from the growing pink spiral. She was able to move her head a little from side to side but her eyes stayed transfixed. She pushed herself back and she hit the wall. Her whole body was still hers, at least for the moment, but her eyes still were glued to her reflection. Keira started to cry.
“I don’t want to obey!” Keira racked her brain but she everything she tried failed to unlock herself from this new entrancement. The spell wouldn’t let her block the gaze, or blink or look away. Keira stared on waiting for an idea when the next development occurred soon after. Her body involuntarily stood up and went rigid. Her arms hung at her side, her face frozen in one of shock. She looked very much like a woman being hypnotized now. Keira seeing that she no longer had control of that either knew her mind was next. However she wouldn’t admit that she had lost yet. That was until the voice came.
“You will obey, everyone else does.”
“No- I will never obey!” Keira called defiantly in her head. But her voice no longer belonged to her either. It did not sound defiant like she wanted- it was very monotone and robotic. Noticing her entranced voice the feeling of dread rose. Keira began to feel hazy again. It felt good to relax and not to resist.
“You WANT to obey. You envy your friends; you want me to be your Master as well.” The voice coaxed her on. Keira was delirious and didn’t know what to do.
“I will never call you Master.” She defiantly yelled but this time nothing came
out of her mouth. Instead the spirals pace quickened and the hypnotic pressure increased to new levels Keira had not experienced yet. Keira was strong but this was intense. The man would never give up, he wanted her too much. Her resistance began to crack.
“Don’t lie to yourself. You have been craving the chance to serve me. Now take it, admit it that you want it. Be enslaved.”
“I want to obey?” Keira thought. She didn’t know what she was saying. She was so submerged in the hazy thoughts she didn’t know what she wanted anymore and the voice was so persuasive.
“Yes, nobody can resist me for long. Relax… admit it...”
“Yes… I want to obey… I am being hypnotized” Keira whispered. A smile came across her face and she said these words. It felt good to admit it. She then said it again louder:
“I AM BEING HYPNOTIZED!” This was what the other slaves were waiting for.
“I told you she would succumb. Even Keira could not resist the master’s
call,” said one of the other women as they entered. They saw Keira standing transfixed looking at herself in the mirror.
“Sleep,” commanded the voice. Keira’s head instantly drooped and Keira was out. Her body slumped down against the back wall. The women approached her.
“Rise, Keira, and join us.”
Keira slowly opened her eyes. They pink mist had fully taken over. A smile crept onto her face. She was hypnotized. Her next words confirmed this.
“I MUST OBEY THE MASTER!” Keira chanted triumphantly. Keira had fallen into submission and was at a critical point no woman had recovered from. There was little hope.
“Keira, you have been mesmerized. Come with us so we can finish your subversion.” One of the women commanded.
“YES…” Keira chanted excitedly. She was now in a deep trance and was accepting her fate. She stood in eager anticipation of the eminent total takeover of her mind. The 6 women split into 3 women on each side of Keira and led her downstairs, their arms raised in the slave-like manner. Keira, who was only partially taken had her arms stiff at her sides. It was so intoxicating to the man to see all his women now under the trance.
“The master takes great pride in your transformation, Keira. You are the ultimate prize for him,” said one of the women.
“I must please the master!” Keira chanted with eagerness. She desired greatly to do everything this mysterious man wanted. She had not met him yet but she wanted to obey his every command. Her subversion is what he desired; she would give herself to him.
They led her to a room with a couch and a TV. Keira sat in the center of the couch by herself and the other women lined up behind the couch. The TV came on, it was a huge spiral. A huge swelling came up deep inside of Keira and she desired to take as much of this in as she could. She didn’t blink at all and absorbed the hypnotic pressure. Her mouth opened slightly in awe of the magnificent power. She had been mesmerized but she had no idea how deep the hypnotic dominance over her could be. This process would cement the spell. She would never recover from this level of mental domination. Keira had been turned into a slave.
After 5 minutes of incessant staring, the spiral faded out and the TV turned off. All 7 women kept looking forward as if they were still staring at it. Keira was still in shock. Her mouth hung open and she looked as if her world had just been rocked. The pink clouds that had dominated her eyes had blended with her beautiful brown iris and were now a pulsating pink mist. The man entered the room.
“Rise Keira Knightley,” he commanded of his new slave.
"YES MASTER!" She chanted involuntarily quickly. The words seemed to send a jolt of life back through her and she bolted back upright. She rose and turned around.
“Oh Master…” She chanted as she finally saw the man who controls her. She could now feel the full extent of his awesome power over her. She smiled. He was pleased. She had put up quite the fight but here she was now fully subservient to his will. He could see she would now gladly serve him. He had hypnotized Keira Knightley!
“Come to me my prize.”
“Yes Master…” Keira chanted again. As she walked to him her arms stretched out to him, another sign of the complete dominance he had over her. When she reached him she automatically got on knees before him. She looked up at him eagerly awaiting her next command to obey. Keira had completely succumbed to his power and there was no going back. She was now the perfect servant.
”Keira Succumbs Episode 2”
Keira’s friends were trapped on an island with her. They had been hypnotized and would not be set free unless Keira hypnotized herself and gave herself up forever. In an alternate universe in this same situation Keira would be overcome by her silent surroundings and loneliness. The spell the island put upon her would drive her to comply by hypnotizing herself into submission.
In this version of the tale Keira is strong and continues to seek out her captor. Her friends for the first few days stayed silent unmoving slaves in the hidden room. The same outfit left out for her remained untouched. Unknown to Keira, her captor was patient and had a backup plan. He waited for the right moment. Keira up to now had shown strong resistance to the outfit, however after searching thoroughly the entire island twice unsuccessfully, she believed she needed a new plan as well. Now she couldn’t deny she had the tiniest desire to wear the outfit, not to obey, but it just looked comfortable. Her main reason for putting it on that day though was to see if it drew the man out of hiding. Once on she went and made herself up. Her reasoning for this was to look the part; her subconscious reason was to prepare for him. The spell on the outfit had secretly started. Keira didn’t notice her slightly robotic movements to the full length mirror.
“Keira, you look stunning today!” Keira said to herself. “Yes, today is the day you shall succumb…overcome!” She slapped herself out of it.
“You are Keira! You are stronger than that. You got to keep a firm grip on yourself!”
She was now aware there was spell on her from the clothes. She must hurry, but she was confident she could resist it. Michael waiting for this moment sprung his trap. As Keira left her room she saw her friends out in the house. At first she thought her plan had worked.
“He thinks I gave in to the spell. They are free!” Keira said with excitement.
Her friends started toward her as Keira told them that it was alright; that she had not been taken. They looked up and Keira saw the pink clouds in their eyes.
“No! What’s wrong with you?” Keira asked in desperation.
The women lifted up their arms and each was holding a pendant and begun swinging them.
“Hypnotize Keira!” The women chanted. Keira saw what was happening and began backing away.
“No! I am your friend! I am trying to free you!” Keira pleaded with them.
“Hypnotize her! Hypnotize her!” The women continued chanting on emotionlessly. They were not slowed in their march toward her. Keira turned and ran down to the end of the hall. They would catch up to her, Keira realized she was trapped. She still felt strong in control of her mind but she wasn’t taking any chances and needed as much time as she could get to try and grab a hold of herself. Keira found herself backed into a corner in the master bedroom. Keira looked where they would appear any second and prepared herself for the mental showdown. This was it. The women came around the corner.
“Come with us Keira. Be like us.” They chanted.
“No.” Keira said strongly.
“You don’t know how good it feels. You must trust us.”
“You don’t know what you are saying! Let me talk to your master and I can free you!”
“Yes we will take you to him…” They said together. Keira smiled. At last she could finish this.
“…as his new slave!” The women finished. They pulled out the amulets and begun swinging them again.
“NO!” Keira screamed and tried to run but she could not move. The spell was working. The women closed in around her. Keira noticed that all the amulets were in perfect unison. This man must have some dark magic power. She realized she was fighting a losing battle, one she couldn’t win. Her eyes were locked onto the amulets. Keira fell to her knees in desperation as her friends closed in.
“Join us Keira!” The unison voices rang in her ears and all she could see were glowing green spirals. Keira's face was frozen in an expression of amazement as she let the spell invade her conciousness. She was being overcome.
“No… I must fight it...” Keira whispered.
"Join us..." They all chanted again. This time Keira chimed in as well.
"Join..." A pink mist grew in her eyes. A smile started to come across her.
"Obey" they called. Keira nodded still tranfixed and mouth agape. Her arms began to rise. Keira couldn't help it- she was being taken! “O... Ob... Obey...NO!” Keira pushed past her friends and stumbled to her feet. Keira was so strong that she still wouldn’t fall yet. Keira looked up and saw the pink mist in her eyes in the mirror.
“No! I can’t be hypnotized!” Keira was right; she had not succumbed yet to the spell. Keira turned around to the group and yelled at them.
“I WON’T BE HYPNOTIZED!” There Keira was wrong; she was strong but it was only a matter of time before even she could no longer resist the spell growing on her mind. It was putting her consciousness to sleep and it would feel really good. Keira ran out of the room. She ran down the hall towards the stairs. She had to get far away; the spell was starting to feel good. The women followed, undeterred in their mission to make their last friend one of them. They saw Keira fall again to her knees in the hallway. Keira got up again stumbled a few feet and then fall back on her knees. It felt so good. She turned around and saw her oncoming attackers.
“You think you can get me?” Keira asked in a desperate tone as she crawled backwards. “You can’t get my mind, I have too good a grasp on it” She said all this with false confidence. Her eyes were glowing with the pink mist. She had no idea how close she was to falling under the spell.
Keira’s ploy to distract her assailants while she crawled backwards into the bathroom had worked. Keira closed the door with her last burst of energy. She was exhausted. She looked at the lock but had not the energy to reach up and use it. Keira decided to brace the door with her leg. She rested against the wall and closed her eyes; she told herself she just needed a second to catch her breath. Her head drooped almost immediately. This was a mistake, her mind would be vulnerable and she would be completely entranced in seconds. Keira bolted awake- she was breathing heavily and looked quite alarmed. Her eyes were completely full of the radiantly glowing pink mist.
“Must! Stay! Awake!” she told herself. She had come back from the brink of submission. She quickly braced the door with her foot. She stayed this way for quite a while and the most amazing thing happened. The pink mist began to recede. This had never happened before. Keira was the strongest woman, putting up the greatest fight against hypnotism. Could she overcome the spell? Having felt the pressure lighten Keira, though tired, got up to check herself and see her progress. There was only a small wisp of the pink left. She was so preoccupied she didn’t hear the robotic voices of the other slaves outside.
“We must hypnotize her.”
“Wait. The master has a plan. She will succumb. Nobody can resist the master’s call to obey for long.”
“I am strong. I have resisted the spell.” Keira smiled to herself. She was about to remove the slave outfit when her premature victory call was proven wrong. Keira saw the last wisp that was hovering in her eyes move. She looked closer to examine this when she saw what was happening. The mist formed a spiral in her eyes and began moving in a circle.
“Oh no, what does this mean?” She couldn’t look away.
“Uhhh! Uhhhh! No not again!” Keira tried as hard as she could to move her head away from the growing pink spiral. She was able to move her head a little from side to side but her eyes stayed transfixed. She pushed herself back and she hit the wall. Her whole body was still hers, at least for the moment, but her eyes still were glued to her reflection. Keira started to cry.
“I don’t want to obey!” Keira racked her brain but she everything she tried failed to unlock herself from this new entrancement. The spell wouldn’t let her block the gaze, or blink or look away. Keira stared on waiting for an idea when the next development occurred soon after. Her body involuntarily stood up and went rigid. Her arms hung at her side, her face frozen in one of shock. She looked very much like a woman being hypnotized now. Keira seeing that she no longer had control of that either knew her mind was next. However she wouldn’t admit that she had lost yet. That was until the voice came.
“You will obey, everyone else does.”
“No- I will never obey!” Keira called defiantly in her head. But her voice no longer belonged to her either. It did not sound defiant like she wanted- it was very monotone and robotic. Noticing her entranced voice the feeling of dread rose. Keira began to feel hazy again. It felt good to relax and not to resist.
“You WANT to obey. You envy your friends; you want me to be your Master as well.” The voice coaxed her on. Keira was delirious and didn’t know what to do.
“I will never call you Master.” She defiantly yelled but this time nothing came
out of her mouth. Instead the spirals pace quickened and the hypnotic pressure increased to new levels Keira had not experienced yet. Keira was strong but this was intense. The man would never give up, he wanted her too much. Her resistance began to crack.
“Don’t lie to yourself. You have been craving the chance to serve me. Now take it, admit it that you want it. Be enslaved.”
“I want to obey?” Keira thought. She didn’t know what she was saying. She was so submerged in the hazy thoughts she didn’t know what she wanted anymore and the voice was so persuasive.
“Yes, nobody can resist me for long. Relax… admit it...”
“Yes… I want to obey… I am being hypnotized” Keira whispered. A smile came across her face and she said these words. It felt good to admit it. She then said it again louder:
“I AM BEING HYPNOTIZED!” This was what the other slaves were waiting for.
“I told you she would succumb. Even Keira could not resist the master’s
call,” said one of the other women as they entered. They saw Keira standing transfixed looking at herself in the mirror.
“Sleep,” commanded the voice. Keira’s head instantly drooped and Keira was out. Her body slumped down against the back wall. The women approached her.
“Rise, Keira, and join us.”
Keira slowly opened her eyes. They pink mist had fully taken over. A smile crept onto her face. She was hypnotized. Her next words confirmed this.
“I MUST OBEY THE MASTER!” Keira chanted triumphantly. Keira had fallen into submission and was at a critical point no woman had recovered from. There was little hope.
“Keira, you have been mesmerized. Come with us so we can finish your subversion.” One of the women commanded.
“YES…” Keira chanted excitedly. She was now in a deep trance and was accepting her fate. She stood in eager anticipation of the eminent total takeover of her mind. The 6 women split into 3 women on each side of Keira and led her downstairs, their arms raised in the slave-like manner. Keira, who was only partially taken had her arms stiff at her sides. It was so intoxicating to the man to see all his women now under the trance.
“The master takes great pride in your transformation, Keira. You are the ultimate prize for him,” said one of the women.
“I must please the master!” Keira chanted with eagerness. She desired greatly to do everything this mysterious man wanted. She had not met him yet but she wanted to obey his every command. Her subversion is what he desired; she would give herself to him.
They led her to a room with a couch and a TV. Keira sat in the center of the couch by herself and the other women lined up behind the couch. The TV came on, it was a huge spiral. A huge swelling came up deep inside of Keira and she desired to take as much of this in as she could. She didn’t blink at all and absorbed the hypnotic pressure. Her mouth opened slightly in awe of the magnificent power. She had been mesmerized but she had no idea how deep the hypnotic dominance over her could be. This process would cement the spell. She would never recover from this level of mental domination. Keira had been turned into a slave.
After 5 minutes of incessant staring, the spiral faded out and the TV turned off. All 7 women kept looking forward as if they were still staring at it. Keira was still in shock. Her mouth hung open and she looked as if her world had just been rocked. The pink clouds that had dominated her eyes had blended with her beautiful brown iris and were now a pulsating pink mist. The man entered the room.
“Rise Keira Knightley,” he commanded of his new slave.
"YES MASTER!" She chanted involuntarily quickly. The words seemed to send a jolt of life back through her and she bolted back upright. She rose and turned around.
“Oh Master…” She chanted as she finally saw the man who controls her. She could now feel the full extent of his awesome power over her. She smiled. He was pleased. She had put up quite the fight but here she was now fully subservient to his will. He could see she would now gladly serve him. He had hypnotized Keira Knightley!
“Come to me my prize.”
“Yes Master…” Keira chanted again. As she walked to him her arms stretched out to him, another sign of the complete dominance he had over her. When she reached him she automatically got on knees before him. She looked up at him eagerly awaiting her next command to obey. Keira had completely succumbed to his power and there was no going back. She was now the perfect servant.